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StIcKy_nOtE15
01-31-2004, 04:53 PM
now this is a differant type of story because my last story iam with you hasnt seemed to be doing so well so here is a new story that might help me so when u get done reading it post what u thought about it thanks !WARNING! this story does get quite sad and somewhat violent.i give credit for insperation to dee .

chapter 1

It was almost valentines day. It was a great to avril,because she was going to see evan. She enjoyed every moment with evan. evan was like her own little teddybear. yes as stupid as it sounded it was true. she had everything set for when evan came to see her on valentines day. she had bought a $500.00 box of the best french chocolets just for evan. she had evrything in her house cleaned for evan. she had everything set up. it was so perfect. tommorow evan came to her house because well its valentines day. she had the hint that he had something big planned for her. maybe a romantic sunset dinner on a yacht. maybe a hot air baloon trip or a new car. whatever it was it was going to be big she hoped. then she got a big scare when the telephone rang. she was so lost her little dream world thinking about evan and her she got scared. it kept ringing then avril picked up the telephone. ''hello?'' she said sweetly. '' avril please tell me are there hello?!''a voice on the phone said. ''um who is this?''avril said slowly. ''oh thank god your ok. listen dont let evan in your house tommorow. dont even speak to him....''the voice said. ''matt is this you?listen i dont care what you say,he is coming.!'' avril was getting mad now. 'yes its me and dont let him in!'' matt screamed. ''listen your just jelous because paris broke up with you.!!'' avril was getting pissed off at matt her drummer. ''oh god please dont let him in.dont do this to me, just belive me..... listen he is going to do something to you.i know he will. i have a bad feeling.''matt said. ''listen matt goodbye ,i know evan,and he's not like that. you might be though.!!!''avril was pissed off now. ''no,please avril dont let......''matt didnt get to finish because avril hung up fast. avril didnt care what matt said. matt was just jelous she kept saying in her head. she just wanted a good time with evan this time. without the papparazzi in her face. she went to her lap top and started to email her family. then the phone rang agian. she got up and went to the phone. when she picked it up.......''hello?''avril asked. ''dont let him in avril!!!''matt said on the other line. ''goodbye matt!''avril said. she was really tried, so she decided to go to bed. she put on the pajamas that her gradmother had made for her as a christmas present. her room was really normal a bed , a tv, everything a room should have. she got into bed and went sleep knowing that bye tommorw she would be with evan. she really did love evan. it killed her to think that matt would say such bad things about evan. avril was awoken by the annyoing sound of her alarm. she turned over to see that her clock said 8:16 . she had about half an hour before evan arived. she was so excited about seeing evan for the first time in 7 months. to her 7 months seemed about forever just to see evan. but worth the wait. there was a knock at the door. avril knew it had to be evan. so ran down stairs with the box of chocolets in her hand. she was so happy. she opened the door it was evan. he didnt seem very happy about seeing her. she hugged him but he didnt hug her back. so she gave him the box of chocolets. he grabed them then threw them on the ground. avril started to get scared. ''evan whats worng are you ok?''avril asked slowly. ''yeah you being alive!!!''evan replyed then he shut the door and locked it. then before avril knew it she was smacked across the face by evan. ''ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.''avril scremed. ''happy valentines day sweetie.''. avril ran upstaris and tried to hide. evan was following her. ''evan please what did i do to you ever please i love you.''avril cried and pleaded. ''no not this time will you make it out of this room alive!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!evan said then the door shut.''nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo.''avril screamed. tears came out of her beautiful blue eyes. she screamed and cried as evan ripped of he shirt. ''nooooooooooooo!please stop it please stop it!!!!!!!!nooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!''scream ed avril. evan left room fast for some reason. avril just lay crying on the floor. she had a gash across her cheek. she was so scared she hid in he closet. and didnt come out for a while. she was to scared to come out of there.to be continued......................................... ................................

Avril_And_3van
01-31-2004, 05:06 PM
I love it ! plz write more

punkaliciousk8tr
01-31-2004, 10:02 PM
Same here plz write more! plz

Evanrocks
01-31-2004, 10:04 PM
yeah this is great keep it comin

KiD
01-31-2004, 10:10 PM
thats awesome!

Evan must be on something... lmao!

Muqaddas_Farishta
01-31-2004, 10:41 PM
You have to write more..... that is sad. What's wrong with sweet Evy?

Crystal
01-31-2004, 11:26 PM
I find it really hard to read when you don't use proper punctuation and space out the paragraphs.

METEORA
01-31-2004, 11:33 PM
i was just about to say that.
It's all in one big paragraph.

Dee
02-01-2004, 04:40 AM
Yeah you have to space the story. It is really hard to read like it is now.

Thanks for saying that I inspired you.

I've read the first part and it is good but can be improved as I said.

I'm not really into violent fics but I'll read the next part to see how it goes and if I should read the other chapters. It is a good fic.

AvrilandEvan22
02-01-2004, 10:47 AM
Yeah it's really hard to read. But it's a good story, I like it!! Lmfao Katey

StIcKy_nOtE15
02-02-2004, 03:36 PM
ok ill write more today then

StIcKy_nOtE15
02-02-2004, 04:55 PM
chapter 2

hunger was now starting to set into avril. she didnt evan eat brekfast. thats how excited she was about meeting evan. now she wished that evan had never had come. she was bleeding like almost all over due to evan pushing her and punching her. she wanted to cry even more but she was all out of tears from before. she didnt know what to do at this point. she was scared about what evan might do to her next. she didnt have her cell phone with her or she would call the cops. she was starting to get sick by staying in that closet. she had no shirt on at all. then she herd the foot steps of someone getting louder. more closer to her hiding place. she tried not brethe so hard but she was scared. then, bam!. the closet door swung open. there stood before her was evan holding a knife. a big one too. "look whose back!!!!''evan said evilily. '' noooooooooooooooooooooooo'' avril screamed. evan held the knife up high above avrils head. avril had to think really fast in order to save her life. then she pushed evan with all her might. he had fallen to the ground. the knife went flying into the air and landed in one of avrils pillows. she ran for her life. kicking evan hard in the making. she ran down the stairs as fast as she could and out the front door. she opended the gate fast and just kept running not looking back. she knew evan was following her at the time. she tried to look for someone. so she started to scream help me very loudly. then she saw a cop on his motor cycle. avril ran to him screaming help. the cop looked to see what was going on. she got up to the cop crying badly. '' lease help me. my friend is trying to kill me please help me please please.!!!!'' avril screamed. the cop looked at her and just drove away. avril didnt know what to do. why did the cop just go and leave her like that. then she felt a sharp pain in the chest. it was her asthma getting to her again. now she knew she wasnt going to make. along side with evan trying to kill her and her asthma, it seemed pretty imposible that she would ever live agian. she didnt care she needed to try to keep on going and not give up on her life now. then she felt very sick, and then she just passed out on the ground. she had passed out because she hadent had anything to eat. .................................................. .................................................. ............... '' calling doctor limuar to room 009" a nurse said over the inter come. avril opended her eyes a little. she could faintly she ome familiar faces. then she sat up staright. she didnt know where she was at all. then she saw a doctor come in to her room. she saw her band mates except for evan. thank god she said to her self. she didnt feel so bad now that she was in the hospital. '' where is evan. did you get him. is he in jail now."avril said. ''what are you talking about avril,we found evan near you when the paramedics got there. he didnt seem to want to let go of you.and you had a cut on your side.but the doctors sealed you up.evan is in questioning with the cops about why he was there and why he had a knife near you.but i other than that i know nothing else.about anything.ok avril"matt said. than all of avrils fears came back agian because she saw some one that she never wished to see again. it was evan and someother guy she knew walk into the morge. ''noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo''avril screamed. than a cop came in wanting to talk to her in private. '' its ok honey.iam officer gallen.i got evan in handcuffs out side now can you tell me everything that happend.''the cop said. avril just started to cry. she couldnt take it anymore. it was to mush to handle.

punkaliciousk8tr
02-02-2004, 06:13 PM
GREAT chapter me want more!

AvrilandEvan22
02-03-2004, 11:43 AM
I'm really confused...lol why does Evan want to kill her? I hope the next chapter explains something. But great chapter!!

KiD
02-03-2004, 03:11 PM
He's being fed Evil-drugs by the blue haired gorilla! lmfao!

Awesome chapter!

Muqaddas_Farishta
02-03-2004, 05:50 PM
No. Not the blue haired gorilla! It's the green bunnies!!! haha inside joke. Anyway, great chapter. Can't wait for more.

PaintedNails
02-03-2004, 07:15 PM
Okay, I just have to say one thing: This story really confuses me...I mean, it's a bit hard to read when it's all jumbled together..

StIcKy_nOtE15
02-04-2004, 07:50 PM
well sorry but i will explain every thing in the next chapter dont worry it gets really good i think

punkaliciousk8tr
02-04-2004, 08:00 PM
sweet! i can't wait to read it then! this is a very interesting story.

DearestHelpless
02-04-2004, 08:04 PM
Originally posted by avrilztwin75@Feb 3 2004, 05:50 PM
No. Not the blue haired gorilla! It's the green bunnies!!! haha inside joke. Anyway, great chapter. Can't wait for more.
But I really really love Jesse....Blue haired gorilla...ha poor kid.

Avril_And_3van
02-04-2004, 09:13 PM
I want more and I want it NOW! keep it coming

I_LUV_Evan
02-05-2004, 01:18 PM
awesome! i can't wait for more!!!

AvrilandEvan22
02-05-2004, 02:20 PM
I agree with PaintedNails..i'm really confused :P

lmao yes the blue haired gorilla. I actually kinda stole that from Bebe..*please don't kill me!!* I like the name lol

Carey
02-07-2004, 05:56 AM
Woah. Mean.

StIcKy_nOtE15
02-07-2004, 08:55 PM
hey i ve been really busy latly but i will get more story up soon

DearestHelpless
02-07-2004, 09:25 PM
Awesome, can't wait. About the criticism some of us have given you about it being not spaced enough, sorry, I feel bad that I did it with you last one, so I'm sorry if it bothered you. And to the people who keep calling Jesse a blue haired gorilla, SO MEAN, lol be nice, there is NOTHING wrong with him, he is awesome.

AvrilandEvan22
02-07-2004, 09:33 PM
Woo I can't wait!! lol and who knows Jesse could be mean!! :P But I, for one, am just calling him a blue haired gorilla because I didn't like him with blue hair, it made him look mean.

StIcKy_nOtE15
02-09-2004, 03:43 PM
well ok
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punkaliciousk8tr
04-28-2004, 06:04 PM
So were is some more story?! *bump* Cuz me would like some more if it's ok.

formely_i_luv_avrils_ bois
04-28-2004, 06:34 PM
yeah me to i'm sucked into it know

mattylover
05-17-2004, 04:00 PM
i like it more more please it rocks