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~AvRiL~
10-13-2002, 08:27 AM
Itz basically 'bout a guy I like....---(really fancy!!!)-who's in my english class!,...but he flirts and carries on with the girl who sits in front of me.......the day I wrote this-they hadn't spoken to each other in class like usual, so as soon as I got home-I had to write about it..


Today you didn't look at her.
You didn't smile or laugh with her.
What had she done? What had she said?
All these thoughts are in my head.

I should have smiled,
I should have smirked,
But realised then-that you were hurt.
The reason that I was not glad,
Was when I saw your face SO sad.

Your cheeky grin-It was not there
What was wrong, I couldn't bear
I sat there with a frowning face,
All you did was look to space.

Yesterday-your grin was bright,
It brought sunlight into my night.
I thought of you-while I slept,
then I saw your face,...and wept.



Tell me if itz utter sh!t£-I won't be offended, Itz jst meant for me to read over and over again anyway-It isn't a masterpeice!
Jenn ~X~

narrator
10-13-2002, 08:52 AM
Its pretty good just try to steer clear of cliches

Lamer Than Lame
10-13-2002, 09:27 AM
Yeah, I was just gonna say that. It's pretty good 'cuz it's difficult writing poems that rhyme.

Tiffanie
10-14-2002, 06:31 AM
well i like it...and its what you were feeling so that makes it a great poem for sure...keep up the good work :)