Sarah

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[AvrilandEvan22]

Omfg...Carly..that was f*cking amazing!! This is really different. I absolutely cannot wait to see what happens. Poor Av. And Sarah. Evan too.

[Evanrocks]

that was great. I can't wait for the next part.

[Dee]

I can't wait for the next chapter either. I really like this story.
It's a great idea to write about.

I've been thinking about writing a similar story but I never got around to doing so. What I came up with didn't sound good. I'm really interested in how the story is going to evolve.

[Open Your Eyes]

I really love this story so far. I've been through the same exact thing. As much as I hate to remember it, this seems to be helping me deal with it a bit.

[Dee]

It is a hard thing to write about and based on the first part I really think you can pull it off.

[KiD]

Originally posted by brokeninside@Apr 13 2004, 12:59 PM
I really love this story so far. I've been through the same exact thing. As much as I hate to remember it, this seems to be helping me deal with it a bit.
THats kinda freaky....I had no clue. I just invisioned the whole single parent this, screaming up the stairs at their daughter, and then it sorta just came out. That really happened to you? whoa.

And I'm glad you guys like it. I'll try to write more later.

[Open Your Eyes]

Yeah. The only thing is... I have a step-father now who always emotionally hurts me.

It's no big deal, though. He just puts so much pressure on me and has tried to change me and shit. It's not like he abuses me, really.

[AvrilandEvan22]

yeah I'm going through family troubles as well, but not this kind. Yay! I was first to reply lmao.

[sk8andRockoN]

Wow, that was i n c r e d i b l e! I absolutely loved it!

[Artemis]

Carly....I'm...speechless. It's happened to me. Not anymore, but when I was younger, I would remember doing that. My biological father didn't want me...he wanted my other brothers and sisters, but not me. Wow...yea that goes pretty deep. Lots of things. Wow. Yea please continue.

[KiD]

Aw, now I feel all guilty for having awesome parents and the whole deal....

And I'll have more up soon. Im wiped out though, my inspiration always seems to come at 11 at night, and I write till I cant keep my eyes open. More soon!

[ninny_23]

Great Chapter Carly!

Meg, you'll always have all the love in the world right here.

[Artemis]

Nancy...awwww that's just....awwwwwwww How sweet. That's so sweet...awwwwwww thank you.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting.........

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[Bebe]

omg carly that was amazing. i feel so bad for her and for avril. Why did Evan have to leave her? And suddenly he just comes back, trying to make everything normal... ugh its just not fair lol. Great job.

hey wait! why can't there be sex scenes in this story?!? you know between avril and evan?!???

[Artemis]

Carly....I'm...I don't know what to say. This is f*cking amazing. Like seriously, you have no idea. I could tell you so much and in certain ways it'd relate right to this story. Crap you're f*cking awesome.

[Evanrocks]

dude this story is so insane. I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm not even supposed to be on to read this chapter. I'll have to sneak on again for the next one.

[KiD]

Originally posted by Bebe@Apr 15 2004, 12:15 PM
hey wait! why can't there be sex scenes in this story?!? you know between avril and evan?!???
Can't really describe them, it's the kid's point of view, so it would come off more gross than anything.

And thank you everybody. As I said, any similarities are completely unintentional. I'm kinda a poser, it's never happened to me. I'm glad you all like it.

[Open Your Eyes]

Wow... that was amazing Carly. Just... holy f*cking hell.

[Dee]

I really liked it. So much emotions. I felt so sorry for Sarah. What a life she has lived. I wonder if Evan coming back in to Avril's life will help her get better. Can't wait for more.

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[ninny_23]

Wow, that was crazy. Great story Carly!

[Artemis]

Carly...I don't know how you do it but you do! You're a kickass writer! I got kind of dizzy when I read the cutting parts but I suppose that's a good thing! Lol. Keep writing, I'm loving this story.

[Dee]

Wow. It's getting scarier all the time. I don't really want to read more because I'm scared on what she'll do to herself but I'm curious so I keep on reading.
Great story.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Originally posted by KiD@Apr 15 2004, 11:05 AM
You know that drives me insane...

Interesting...........

[Open Your Eyes]

Originally posted by avriljunkie@Apr 15 2004, 10:56 PM
Carly...I don't know how you do it but you do! You're a kickass writer! I got kind of dizzy when I read the cutting parts but I suppose that's a good thing! Lol. Keep writing, I'm loving this story.
You took the words right out of my mouth, Meg.

[Evanrocks]

awesome simply awesome. this story is extremely addictive. I can't wait ofr the next part.

[KiD]

Uh, so I'm kinda running around screaming for free time (oh look, free time!) but last night was kinda "Hurry u[p and get to bed so you can wake up really early" So I didn't have that time before falling asleep that I usually have to think about my stories.

And I'm kind of scared...I mean, I have to write at the same level I was and....this is really cool.

Anyways, it may be a day or so from today. Just to let you know.

And thank you all for your comments. They mean so much to me, and it makes me so happy to know that you guys like my work.
I'll go write now.

[ninny_23]

Can't wait until the next chapter is up!

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

hey what about your other story? :blink:

[Dryve Thru Romance]

omg....wow...this story is sooooo goood! wow I love it! can't wait for more

[KiD]

Originally posted by IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2@Apr 18 2004, 09:01 AM
hey what about your other story? :blink:
Its coming. I'm all bummed out so expect more from it soon, and then from this one. lmfao. My mind is weird. Sorry for the wait!

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

tis ok for the wait. your stories are ....... Interesting... :P

i only read 3 fics, your two and will's :)

[sk8andRockoN]

Wow, Carly! Just ... wow! This story is absolutely amazing. I love it so much! Can't wait for more!

[FollowMe]

Wow, this fic is friggin awesome. Your're a great writer. Keep up the great work! :D

[AvrilandEvan22]

Just caught up..omfg Carly. How do you write like this? It's f*cking awesome, I love it so much! omg....it has a really strong plot as well, and it makes reading it exremely intense. Absolutely amazing. Cannot wait to see what happens. Omg.

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[Artemis]

Aww Carly I'm crying. That was....I don't know what to say. I can say that it does bring back some memories that'd I'd like to forget..I thought I had actually, but I hadn't. Oh well. That was unbelievable. I love this story.

[Elaine]

MEG!!!!!

[Artemis]

Elaine! Yes? lol.

[Open Your Eyes]

Aww... that was amazing, Carly. I started crying. And once again Meg takes the words right out of my mouth. Haha.

[Artemis]

Aww haha lots of things that we have in common I suppose.

[Evanrocks]

no!!! avril can't leave her. that part was amazing. I truly can't wait for the next one.

[FollowMe]

That was real awesome. I actually started crying. Great chapter. Can't wait for the next one.

[ninny_23]

Wonderful chapter Carly! *cheers*

[Dee]

I cried too. I think everyone who reads this fic cries. I can't wait for more. I feel so sorry for Sarah, Avril and Evan.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

i don't cry

[sk8andRockoN]

W o w Carly! I loved that, I loved every bit of this story so far! It's one of the best ones I've read.

[Dryve Thru Romance]

omgomgomgomgomgomg! ahh omg i want more!

[AvrilandEvan22]

Holy hell!! That was awesome. Oh man...this is a really different story but its still amazing! Carly you rock! lmao

[Crystal]

This story is really, really interesting. I'm hooked! I can't believe I didn't read this sooner lol. I love it! You're a great writer.

[KiD]

Thanks guys. I really, honestly didn't want to make you cry. Awwwwwww.


Anyways, I might type up some more later. I have a vague outline in my head. This thing is all impromptu, so we'll see.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting.......

[derycksmyhero]

Holy friggin' hell! You're telling me my story is good? No, no, no, no, no! This puts anything I've written to shame! All I can say is, when a story makes you cry, you know it's better than good. I can't even find a word for this. It's so different from the fairy tale stories you read and...ok I'm babbling now, but er...I'll be camped for the next chapter...

[Dryve Thru Romance]

lol ^ i agree with derycksmyhero!!!!
can't wait! [evan tho i've already stated i loved that chapter haha] can't say it enough :P

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting.........

[AvrilandEvan22]

^lmfao

Ah I thought there'd be more by now!

[sk8andRockoN]

Carly, I need stooory!

*Ahem*

I mean ... uh ... yeah, take all the time you need!















<_<

[KiD]

I'm deciding wether or not to add more to the chapter. I think I wil. It'll probably be up today. It's like, 5 pages right now so yeah.

[ninny_23]

Yes!! I'll be home at 5:pm my time so I hope it's up by then!

[AvrilandEvan22]

^That was confusing...

lmao Molly....*cough*Waiting...

[ninny_23]

Well, It's 9:00 am right now where I live. And I'm gonna leave in 90 minutes. I'll be back home at 5:00 pm ready to start reading.

[KiD]

I'll do my best Nancy! *salutes*

[AvrilandEvan22]

Yeah!! lmao..I get it now.

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[Dee]

Wow, that was great. I feel more and more sorry for Sarah. I hope she gets well. I hope Avril gets well too and I hope Evan can sort out the things he needs to sort out too.

[formely_i_luv_avrils_ bois]

OMG you have to right more now!!! i am in love with this story plz plz plz write more soon

[derycksmyhero]

The way you describe this...the pain and all this...it's unreal. Well, actually I guess it would be real because the story just comes to life in your mind when you read it. It's just....amazing. I'll be camped for the next chapter...

[ninny_23]

Terrific chapter Carly! I'm really glad that you posted it for us!

[TelescopeEyes]

I just caught up with this. I feel for sarah.. great story.

[AvrilandEvan22]

Oh wow. I love this story!! AHHHH that was amazing. Carly you rule lmao.

[Artemis]

Carly, each chapter gets better and better. I'm so speechless. I hope you get the next one up soon.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting................

[Crystal]

I love this story! Keep writing.

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[Crystal]

That was so sad! I'm crying now. Awww poor Sarah.

[Artemis]

I'm crying too. f*ck Avril. I can't believe she did that. And they're disowning her too. That's horrible. This is an amazing story. I love it to death Carly.

[ninny_23]

Damn, sucky parents. Great chapter Carly!

[TelescopeEyes]

Poor sarah..aw, I loved that chapter. Just amazing.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting.............

[derycksmyhero]

Aww here with the tears again...I love it!

[Dryve Thru Romance]

omg i caught got up in this story at school today! i printed out [and almost missed the bus:P] and read it in study hall and i was all like omg...soooooo gooood!!

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting...............

[ninny_23]

^ We understand. U-N-D-E-R-S-T-A-N-D. Un der stand.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting..........

[sk8andRockoN]

W-O-W Carly, what can I say? I just love this story to death! And it's amazing how well those lyrics fit into the chapter. They're perfect for it.

I can't wait for more!

[formely_i_luv_avrils_ bois]

oooooo i loved it, it was sad and and and i can't think of the word but it was great!!!!!

[KiD]

Thanks guys. It really, truly, honestly means so much that you guys actually like this. I'm going to try and put up some more, maybe tonight if i don't get distracted.

[Crystal]

Of course we like it! You're a great writer.

[punkaliciousk8tr]

Yes you are a great writer I agree with Crystal. I have read this story and I enjoy it to death. Can't wait for more til then I will be here!

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting.............

[sk8andRockoN]

Okay, David. We know.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting...........

[BlurredInnocence]

My, you have quite the imagination! You were able to keep me hooked all throughout the chapters, and the narration was unbelievable, not to mention the descriptions, and emotions that one could feel when reading it. Nice job.

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[Crystal]

Awww that was so sad! It's sweet that Avril beat Tom up, though! I don't think this story is too repetitive, I think it flows perfectly.

[Bebe]

awwwwwwwwwwww that was so sad. its not repititive at all. you did an amazing job with this chapter carly.

[AvrilandEvan22]

:o I am speechless. There is absolutely nothing I can say to describe how deep and awesome that was. :o :cry:

[Dee]

I really loved it. Amazing and I can't wait for more.

[Evanrocks]

awesome chapter. I loved that avril beat tom up. I can't wait for more.

[ninny_23]

Aww, I thought Tom sounded pretty hot. Great chapter Carly!

[TelescopeEyes]

Awesome chapter Carly!

[derycksmyhero]

Well Avril beating Tom up redeemed her slightly, but still this is a sad story. It's definitely not repetitive, every chapter is surprise and you don't know what the hell is going to happen so I consider that a better than awesome story right there! Hope to see more soon!

[Artemis]

Carly, your story isn't repetitive like everyone else has said. It's a great story. I love it. You gives lots of details and explain things well.

[AvrilandEvan22]

^Yup, just like you. Lmao at first I thought you said that we said it was repetitive..

*cough*

[formely_i_luv_avrils_ bois]

ooooo i think i need more of this lovely story lol plz

[Muqaddas_Farishta]

Ok, I'm sitting here sobbing! This is one of the best stories I have read. It's so deep and amazing! I can't wait to see what happens next. This is a beautiful story.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting...........

[Open Your Eyes]

Awesome job, Carly. It's not repetitive! I love it.

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting...........

[sk8ergurl_usa]

OMG!! this story is amazing!! it made me cry!! :cry: so im sitting here crying and wanting the next chapter... so deep, so wonderful, so, I love it!! I want more!! *trying not to cry cuz of the story*

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting............

[sk8ergurl_usa]

^^ is that all u ever say??

[sk8andRockoN]

Omg Carly! I love this story! And it's not repetative at all. Great chapter! I can't wait for more.

[ninny_23]

Yes! We all love it! lol Pickles... roflmao OMG! I almost fell off my chair. lmao

[sk8ergurl_usa]

*waits for more*needs more*

[Dryve Thru Romance]

omg i love this story...dude i wow....you always leave me in this semi shock, wowed state after i read this story....well, uh the chapter was good, i can't wiat for more..that's all i think i can get out at the moment and make sense

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

Interesting............

[AvrilandEvan22]

I am amazed at how little of fics I've missed.

[sk8ergurl_usa]

were's the next cpt??

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

A-Town... Hotlanta represent! :P anyways yea Interesting...........

[sk8ergurl_usa]

when is she gonna update??

[KiD]

Soon, I promise. I'm done typing it, I just need a bit of guidane on something for it. Terrbily sorry for the wait!

[ninny_23]

Did you mean guidance? lol My face is totally contorted because I'm really confused.

[mattylover]

:D OMG OMG i love it it to got for world that the closed i have been to crying man it so good it.I have to sa yi hate haveing thta felling now no one needs u that ur so unwant i get that evey day i love this sroty more more

[sk8ergurl_usa]

its gd aint it???

[sk8ergurl_usa]

*wants more*

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

thought you said you were done typing it? :blink:

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[Open Your Eyes]

Awww... great job, Carly! I loved it!

[derycksmyhero]

Awwww Carly this was so f*cking awesome!

[EvaAd0re]

Awww! This story is so sweet! I love it, I absolutly love it!

[Muqaddas_Farishta]

Amazing. Brilliant, by far one of my favorites. It's actually helping with some of the problems I'm going through right now.

[ninny_23]

Aww, beautiful Carly!! What a story... heh, squiggly.

[Dee]

Yeah, that was amazing. Written so beautifully.

[TelescopeEyes]

Hell Carly, I loved that. Awesome story!!

[IwAnTuAnDuWaNtMe2]

so is this the end of it? great stroy... is there another fic somewhere in the mists? :D

[sk8andRockoN]

Wow, that was great!

[Dryve Thru Romance]

omg this story is by far one of the best stories i've read in forever! and omg....KiD i love this story so much!!! :) love it one of my favorites!!!

[sk8ergurl_usa]

so this is the end then? i loved it. awsome job

[formely_i_luv_avrils_ bois]

OMFG that was so f*cking amazing i can't believe it...it shouldn't be over no no no i like it to much lol

[sk8andRockoN]

We're waiting. ;-)

[Dryve Thru Romance]

just bumping this story that i love so dearly haha....i hope she continues this one cause i really love it.

[sk8ergurl_usa]

A squele... yes

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[Dee]

That was good. Keep on writing.

[ninny_23]

Ooh, that's twisted. I like it very much, though. Write more soon.

[mattylover]

omg loves it like her gradnfather an'it so grand at all he mean ike iwould have cryed rat there or hit him ( i have probly wiht that) any ways kool can't wait

[sk8ergurl_usa]

How dare evan not marry av?! oh btw keep going, you added an awesome twist

[conversegirl]

love this story carly! continue please!

[KiD]

Thanks for all the feedback guys! I should get the ball rolling in the next two weeks...as soon as i settle into school!

[Dryve Thru Romance]

yayyayyyy! :D i can't wait for more! i was so sad to think that the chapter 8 was the end lol AH! YAY! i can't wait that is a crazy little twist u got in there :D!

[KiD]

[change of heart]

[Dee]

Interesting.

[conversegirl]

Finally, i have been waiting, Carly..lol, great chapter, keep them coming!

[mattylover]

wow so weith the wait man thatwas good ur rokc Kid i mean wowthat was gd
ca't wait for more

[Dryve Thru Romance]

Wonderful chapter!!! Can't wait for more!! :D