*this Girl*

[TelescopeEyes]

I haven't been around here for a while.. I've written one or two fan fics before.. so here's another. It's nothing great though.

[Dee]

This is another take on the whole Avril-Jesse thing.
Since we will never know what really happened stories like this can and will emerge.

I really like it even though I often only read Avril and Evan stories. Av and Ev are cute together.

I'm interested in how things will develop in this story.

[infamous]

Wow this was really amazing! I love it.
Very nice writing, i love how you captured Jesse's emotions .. I can't wait for more!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks, I'll get working on some more.

[FallingDown]

Good Chapter... write more.

[ninny_23]

That was so sad. Lovely chapter though, write more soon!

[Dryve Thru Romance]

wow that was cool! can't wait for more

[KingJJP]

like wow lisa i loved it cant wait but what about soulmate :( i was looking forward to reading the last chapter but i guess your way to busy

[TelescopeEyes]

I've made a start on the next part, so I'll have it up later.

[infamous]

good! ...i can't wait lol.

[ninny_23]

When is later exactly? Can't wait until it is posted!

[TelescopeEyes]

I was going to post it later last night, but I hadn't got much done. I'm writing right now.. so I'll have it up shortly.

[KingJJP]

ya i so so so so cant wait lisa

[infamous]

I'll be waiting!

[TelescopeEyes]

watch this space --------------

[infamous]

Holy ... that was brilliant.
I really love this story. Your use of the first person is perfect!

Can't wait for more!

[KingJJP]

great chapeter as always lisa i just hope you get to give this one an ending

[FallingDown]

More!, Great chapter Lisa.

[FallingDown]

More!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks you three, I'm writing more now.. I've got some time on my hands, I'm writing more now.. so hopefully I might have more chapters up today.

[TelescopeEyes]

check it out now ----------------

[Open Your Eyes]

Aww... like I've said before.. You write beautifully! Can't wait for more!

[KingJJP]

like yay that was very brill lisa like always

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks Rush, I'm glad you guys are liking it. I'm working on more now.. but my mother's being a pain in the ass.

[Artemis]

Holy f*ck. f*cking hell. I...wow. Those chapters are beautiful. They are. Oh man.

[TelescopeEyes]

You feeling ok? lol.. Aw, thanks a lot Meg.. I'm writing the next part now.

[TelescopeEyes]

and they called it puppy love -------------

[Open Your Eyes]

Awww... I'm fighting back the tears. That was great, Lisa!

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks a lot Rush.. I didn't think it would case tears. I'm really glad you liked it.

[KingJJP]

lisa wow your will be so f*cking great at doing your on short storys

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks a lot.

[FallingDown]

Great chapters lisa!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks, Brandon! I'm going to sleep shortly.. so I don't think I'll have anymore up tonight. So if not, It will be up sometime tommorow.

[infamous]

wow that was amazing. I feel so bad for Jesse though. I hope he's gonna be alright.

Can't wait for more!

[ninny_23]

Wonderful Story! I'll be here tomorrow, definitely.

[TelescopeEyes]

^^ Thanks a lot. :)

I've written up what's gonna happen in the next couple of chapters.. It's just a matter of writing it all out.

The next chapter will be up later today, when I get home.

[TelescopeEyes]

..................................banananana

[Dee]

I really loved it. Can't wait for more.

I want Av and Ev to be together.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks a lot Dee, I'm glad you liked it.

I'm working on more. I'll probably have one or two chapters up tonight.. maybe more.

[Dee]

That was fast. Can't wait.

[KingJJP]

you rule lisa thats all i can say

[Evanrocks]

that was great. I can't wait for more.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks guys, I'm a bit behind with the next chapter because I had to babysit.. but I'm working on it.

[Artemis]

Your writing is breathtaking. You know how to describe things and actually make the reader feel what the characters are feeling. Nice job.

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, Meg.. that means alot. I'm glad you're liking it. I'm pretty behind on the next part I have it all planned out but babysitting and parents nagging is keeping me behind. I'll try and get it up tonight.

[Dee]

You don't have to hurry. Take your time. You can put it up whenever you want. If it'll be later this week then it will be then.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks Dee, I'm working through this chapter and I will have it up shortly. I'm taking my time.. so don't worry. I just hope you guys like it.

[KingJJP]

no need to hope

[TelescopeEyes]

step this way ----------------

[Open Your Eyes]

Lisa... HOLY f*ck. There are no words to explain this... just... wow. Holy f*ck.

[FallingDown]

Great chapter.

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks a lot Rush.. I'm glad you're still reading it.

Thanks Brandon. I'll have more up tommorow.

[KingJJP]

:) no need to say how great that was

[Dee]

I love it. Can't wait for more.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks you guys.

[infamous]

wow! your writing is really beautiful. I love the way you make certain pauses with your sentences. I don't know if i'm describing it properly, but if i am, it's amazing. This story is amazing.

Can't wait for more!

[Artemis]

Holy, holy f*ck. Lisa...wow. I, I'm speechless. I love this story.

[ninny_23]

*gasp* Is it who I think it is? Or am I thinking something wrong?

Marvelous chapter!!!

[TelescopeEyes]

Originally posted by infamous@Apr 26 2004, 07:02 PM
wow! your writing is really beautiful. I love the way you make certain pauses with your sentences. I don't know if i'm describing it properly, but if i am, it's amazing. This story is amazing.

Can't wait for more!
Thanks Infamous, I know what you mean lol.. It's just kinda the way I write...

Thanks a lot meg and ninny_23...

sorry I don't know you're names..

[TelescopeEyes]

a bloody storm. -------------

[KingJJP]

wow that was just sooooooooo wow i cant find the words

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks. I'll work on some more later. I just have something to sort out.. I really don't want too.

[infamous]

wow that was really amazing. I didn't expect a Jesse return like that. I really love this story!!

[Open Your Eyes]

That was amazing, Lisa! Keep it coming.

[xXx]

this is making me horney

[TelescopeEyes]

I wasn't sure if I was gonna have Jesse return for that I didn't plan it that way but I thought actually I will.. glad you liked that Infamous. (Sorry I don't know you're name)

Aw and thanks Rush.. I'll try and keep it coming.

[infamous]

It's alright, my name is Christina.

[FallingDown]

^^ Yea but just call her Chris...:P Right?

Great chapter Lisa!...

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks Christina... and thanks Brandon.. glad you guys liked it.

[ninny_23]

Wow, that was amazing!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks a lot.

[TelescopeEyes]

you pissed me off....goodbye. ------

[KingJJP]

this was a great chapter lisa i love it

[FallingDown]

Great chapter Lisa.

[infamous]

I loved this chapter. So emotional and well written!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks a lot Christina. Glad you liked it.

[TelescopeEyes]

I might have more up tonight or tommorow..

[KingJJP]

yo lisa i so cant wait i was hopeing to read the new chapter when i got in all well now i have somethink to look frowerd tomoz

[TelescopeEyes]

Ok, thanks. If not tonight, then tommorow.

[KingJJP]

take your time lisa dont rush it girl ^_^

[TelescopeEyes]

I won't.

[KingJJP]

kool i so cant wait this will have a ending right lol

[TelescopeEyes]

Does ever story have to have an ending?

Yea, It will have an ending..

[KingJJP]

well i guess the last one was a 1st for me not to have an ending lol never mind

[TelescopeEyes]

I haven't written anything tonight. I'll have more up on the weekend...

[KingJJP]

oh ok well its kool take your time sweetie

[infamous]

I'm excited for this weekend.

[ninny_23]

Wow, that was deadly. Great job!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks a lot you two.

[TelescopeEyes]

I'll have the next chapter up tonight.

I might have more up than that, but if not then sometime this weekend. I have a longer weekend because it's bank holiday monday or something.

[BlurredInnocence]

I like this story. You seem to know how to get the characters feelings down and make the reader believe he/she knows exactly how they are feeling. I love your sense of description, and how you were able to make everything come together. I'm interested in seeing what happens next.

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks a lot.. I'm really glad that you like it. I'm writing more to the next chapter.. I'll have it up tonight, thanks again Blurredinnocence (Sorry I don't know you're name)

[KingJJP]

ya i so cant wait

[TelescopeEyes]

and dreams they dissapear!!!!

[KingJJP]

damn lisa that didnt suck that ending got to me :(

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks.

[KingJJP]

no need to say thanks <_<

[infamous]

That didn't suck at all! .. I love it, i love the way Jesse's being so nice. It's sweet. I can't wait for more. =)

[TelescopeEyes]

It did but thanks a lot Chris.

[Muqaddas_Farishta]

This story is....wow....words cannot explain it. It's one of the most beautiful fanfics I've read in a long time. Wow...

[ninny_23]

Great chapter. Too bad for Avril though. I loved the part with the little girl, it was so sweet!

[FallingDown]

isnt it.

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks guys...

[METEORA]

oh my god, i just read all the chapters at once, their awesome, haha you have to post more soon!!!! great chapters!!

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks a lot.. I will have more up soon.

[ninny_23]

Wonderful, I love your story!

[TelescopeEyes]

nothing to see here -------------

[KingJJP]

awww lisa your so great its like the keyboard is your soul well the writing side of it anyway

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks a lot.. It's not that good of a chapter, but thanks alot anyway.

[KingJJP]

well i did love it

[Muqaddas_Farishta]

That was beautiful. I can't wait for more. Your writing is so beautiful.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks you two.

[KingJJP]

no prob ^_^

[FallingDown]

Awesome chapter!....

[infamous]

wow that chapter was f*cking amazing! I love all those descriptions ..really awesome!

I can't wait for more.

[TelescopeEyes]

Aww, thanks a lot Chris!.. I'm glad your still reading it!..

[KingJJP]

just bring to next chapter please

[METEORA]

that was really good, post more soon:)

[Evanrocks]

awesome chapter. keep it comin'.

[Open Your Eyes]

Shit. I kept forgetting to comment this! Great work, Lisa!

[ninny_23]

Aww, Avril is really screwed right now. That is a wonderful chapter!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks a lot everyone. I'll have more up soon.

[KingJJP]

ya i so cant wait lisa

[infamous]

Originally posted by Avril-Isit@May 1 2004, 01:31 PM
Aww, thanks a lot Chris!.. I'm glad your still reading it!..
Of course i'm still reading it! ..and i can't wait till you post more.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks a lot Chris! I will have more up shortly..

[FallingDown]

Cool, I'll wait!

[TelescopeEyes]

a dogs dinner ------------

[KingJJP]

great work lisa no wait super great chapter i love it

[infamous]

"Sure, forever sound good enough for you?" His smile so warm. I can feel one burning inside me, and I let it surface, I can't hide it.

I find that part adorable! This was an amazing chapter. I've been waiting two days for it lol ..and now i can't wait for more!

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks a lot Chris!.. I'm glad you found that adorable.. Sorry for the wait, I only just wrote that this morning. I'll get working on more, I haven't got college today.

[infamous]

It's alright, take your time. I just think i'm obsessed with this story. Keep writing lol.

[TelescopeEyes]

It's not that I rush it, I just start typing and it comes together pretty fast. I want a longer chapter for the next one.. I'm glad you like my story, thanks a lot!

I will have another chapter up today.

[KingJJP]

well i just cant wait to read the next one

[infamous]

I will be patient and wait lol.

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks guys! I won't keep you waiting for too long, or will I?

[infamous]

Don't tease lol. I love this story

[TelescopeEyes]

Well...

lol, thanks Chris.. I'm writing more now.

[KingJJP]

great

[TelescopeEyes]

ffffffff fred. -------------

[KingJJP]

i loved it lisa your such a f*cking great writer

[infamous]

f*ck Lisa ..that was incredible! You know i'm a fan already lol but wow ..that was really good. I like edgy Avril ..more angst!

I can't wait for more.

[MorningStar]

that was incrdible, can't wair for the next chapter!

[Dee]

I loved it. Can't wait for more.

[Muqaddas_Farishta]

aww wow! This is soo sweet, and sad. Ihope av and ev end up getting toegether!

[ninny_23]

Awww, that is so sad. They sure have a lot of ups and downs.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks everyone, I'll have more up shortly.

[Open Your Eyes]

And on goes my list of forgetting to comment. Someone hit me, lol.

Awesome job so far, Lisa! Can't wait for more.

[TelescopeEyes]

You're forgiven for forgetting.. lol. Thanks Rush! I haven't started the next chapter yet but I will shortly..

[infamous]

I can't wait for it!

[KingJJP]

or can i lisa

[infamous]

we have to give the genious time! lol

[KingJJP]

lol ya you do you do

[ninny_23]

Hmmm, I guess I'll read another fanfic as I wait.

[TelescopeEyes]

Sorry that I haven't got anymore chapter up!

I know what's gonna go on in the next chapter and stuff.. just a matter of writing it up! It will be here shortly.

[KingJJP]

ya kool cant wait

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks.. I'll get working on it.

[ninny_23]

Oooooh, shortly... Okay, I'm waiting.

[EvaAd0re]

wow this story is amazing! it's so sad! can't wait for more!

[TelescopeEyes]

there's something in my eye --------

[FallingDown]

Great chapter, Lisa!.. it didn't suck.

[infamous]

That was amazing! I love the way you described everything, all the emotions. It was almost like i felt what Av was feeling. Incredible job!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks Brandon...

Aw, thanks a lot Chris!

[Dee]

Yeah, it was really great.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks alot Dee!

[ninny_23]

That is magnificent! Awesome story!!

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks a lot!

[Open Your Eyes]

Great job, Lisa! Can't wait for more!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks a lot Rush, I'll get working on more shortly. I would make a start now, but well it's 2:30am!

[PaintedNails]

I just read all of this story just now, and I love it! I can't wait for more!!

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw, thanks.. glad you like it!

[ninny_23]

Wow, it's only 8:00 pm here.

[Muqaddas_Farishta]

that was awesome, can't wait for mores.

[KingJJP]

great lisa it didnt suck but it wasnt as great as the other chapters but i did love it

[EvaAd0re]

holy! that chapter totally rocked! i hate laura! lmao. can't wait for more!

[ninny_23]

It was really great! Can't wait until your next chapter is up!

[TelescopeEyes]

Sorry that I've kind of negelcted this!.. I just haven't felt like writing it but I'll try and get it up Friday sometime..

[KingJJP]

lisa dont worry no need to carry on with it sweetie if you wanna stop stop its ok

[TelescopeEyes]

lol, no.. I don't want to stop. I just haven't been in the mood to write it but I'm still going to, unless no one wants to read it.

[KingJJP]

hell no i still want to read it

[infamous]

Friday is tomorrow. I can't wait!

[ninny_23]

I can't wait either!

[TelescopeEyes]

.brrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr --------

[infamous]

Ooo a dedication *smiles*

This chapter is amazing! You describe everything so perfectly Lisa. How do you do it? No one knows.

[TelescopeEyes]

lol, yes you should feel special.. My story rocks, lmao not.

Glad you liked it Chris, even though It's kinda rushed.. but I wanted to get something done. How do I do it? Um, I just type words.

[FallingDown]

Great chapter Lisa.

[ninny_23]

Wow, that truly is an amazing chapter!

[Open Your Eyes]

Beautiful chapter, Lisa! I loved it!

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks guys! Glad you liked it...

[Dee]

That was so great. I feel so sorry for Avril. Such a sad chapter.

I can't wait for more.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks Dee, glad you liked it!

[KingJJP]

great chapter lisa i dont know why i posted you know i love your work

[ninny_23]

We all love your story! Keep writing because it is a truly amazing story.

[TelescopeEyes]

Aw thanks... I will get writing more.

[KingJJP]

you know i love your work and god damn i bet you f*ckin got like a's and b's in your GCSE's

[TelescopeEyes]

lol, thanks. I'll get more up soon as I can.

[KingJJP]

right i so cant wait lisa

[ninny_23]

Wonderful, hope it's up soon!

[TelescopeEyes]

I should have it up sometime on the weekend.

[KingJJP]

yea so cant wait

[TelescopeEyes]

I'm making a start on writing the chapter up now, I might have it up by friday.

[KingJJP]

oh ya so kool cant wait its my birthday

[ninny_23]

Happy Birthday!! Can't wait until Friday.

[KingJJP]

lol its not until november lol i only said that cause i cant wait till the great lisa dose the next chapter

[TelescopeEyes]

a chicken in a suit! -----------

[KingJJP]

lia thiers no way how much i can tell you how brill that is girl i loved it

[infamous]

Lisa wow! that is amazing. I really enjoyed this chapter.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks, JJP.

Thanks Aww!, glad you liked it.. even though it sucked.

[ninny_23]

It did not suck!! It was wonderful.

[TelescopeEyes]

Thanks Nancy, aw!

Just to let you guys now that read this.

I've got new fresh ideas in my head for another fan fic. I'm working on that at the moment because new ideas are pouring out and I wanted to start another one after this comes to an end, anyway. I'm working on my new fic, but I will still finish this one.

I'll get the chapter up shortly.

[KingJJP]

lisa get your sweet ass on here and post that chapter





please

[ninny_23]

lmao I can't wait!

[Open Your Eyes]

^Me neither, Nancy!

[TelescopeEyes]

Why you.. you little shit!..

[Open Your Eyes]

Roflmfao! Steve!

[TelescopeEyes]

Stever.. get it right! and get out!

[Open Your Eyes]

Nevah, Granny!

[TelescopeEyes]

Screw you.

lmfao.. I have a plan.

[Open Your Eyes]

Lmfao. No thanks.

Hmph

[derycksmyhero]

Oh God...plans are bad. Trust me, I KNOW THIS...

[TelescopeEyes]

Kayla..how could you?